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    dots Submission Name: flies and swine will share their winedots
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    Author: dawfemme
    ASL Info:    16/f/?
    Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 27/27/22
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 698
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    Description:
       its about a book. tell me what you think it means/analyze. I think it help to know what others get from it to juxtapose outer opinions to what i think of it. I'm probably gonna make some changes


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    dotsflies and swine will share their winedots
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    How to decide who gets to survive
    The the mad red came into his eyes
    Kill the piggy
    Cut her throat
    Bash her in
    Jack turned upon his gritted heel
    Tonight is the night
    Swine and flies will gather to dine

    Freud gave some super insight
    Was the boy with the long blnde hair really the id?

    He is the hunger
    He is the drive
    He is the sin in the corner of the eye

    Foolish boys,
    such silly boys
    You canít make murder into plays
    or put paint on your face
    Those savage kinds of clowns,
    really arenít safe

    Little pigs
    Little pigs
    Run free
    Run free
    All thatís left on the hilltop are ashes from fire
    and the beast.
    Little pigs must feast
    Eat and drink sweetly
    Because he brought the bacon




    Submitted on 2006-11-08 20:56:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      haha i love it !!! brutal sarcastic, i love it. bitter and kinda creepy. sick and delicous.
    | Posted on 2006-11-19 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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