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    dots Submission Name: Black and Bluedots

    Author: Two Meters Away
    ASL Info:    16/F/NJ
    Elite Ratio:    0.91 - 172/43/29
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Romance
    Total Views: 793
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       I found this on my old Hero of the Day account, and it's still cool, so why not?

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    dotsBlack and Bluedots

    The words delivered to me in black and blue
    I love these words I trust they're true
    I live by these words, follow them through and through
    My emotions they never fail to change and bend
    Black and blue are the color my insides turn in the end

    Sometimes the text in black and blue makes me ill
    After I had my kicks and thrills
    I passed out and hit the window sill
    Before I went into a deep sleep for awhile
    The last thing I recall seeing was your loving smile

    Oh, the things I saw in my dreams
    I've learned nothing is as it seems
    These words are taking it to an extreme
    Congratulations, you've hit your all-time low
    Pushing and shoving and boosting your ego

    Submitted on 2006-11-08 21:10:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i love this
    its very obvious how badly your feeling , so if you ever need some one to talk to i'm here
    i love the rhyme scheme in this
    its all to gether just a great write...
    | Posted on 2006-11-09 00:00:00 | by dark lover | [ Reply to This ]
      is the emotion written to someone... or is it just something you thought you'd write. either way it is fantastic... i really like it...your words flow and the emotion is obviously you being hurt.. whoa. keep it rockin'

    _*denny ;; [x3]
    | Posted on 2006-11-08 00:00:00 | by given_belief | [ Reply to This ]

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