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    dots Submission Name: Autumn Taledots
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    Author: oixi
    ASL Info:    50/M/California
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 196/243/100
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       This is a terza rima poem. Terza rima is a type of poetry consisting of 10 or 11 syllable lines arranged in three-line "tercets".


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    dotsAutumn Taledots
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    Intense and quiet tones rustle in sunlight,
    Captured as leaves, fallen from autumn trees.
    A colorful death thats rendered so bright,

    Scattered like slain soldiers, caught in the breeze.
    They dance by our feet on currents of wind,
    That blows briskly and can cause one to sneeze.

    Chattering squirrel searches for food to rescind,
    Away in the tree hollow he calls his home.
    Finds an acorn from an oak that was trimmed

    Down by the gale and concealed in the loam.
    The squirrel takes his treasure back to his tree,
    Concluding the tale of this seasonal poem.




    Submitted on 2006-11-09 12:13:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      there was some pretty good imagery. fall is my favorite season and you do a pretty good job of creating fall. nice work.

    i tip my hat and bid thee farewell.
    | Posted on 2006-11-10 00:00:00 | by PoeticNonsense | [ Reply to This ]


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