our apogee was much too high
Brobdignagian at the zenith
the daedal, plenary peaks
now barely extant
our comity shattered
a congeries of premature surrender
passes, cuggermugger, down the
fractured channel that was -us-
polyglot groupings chatter among ruins
spreading rumors of our capitulation
faceless automatons cant
stringing false perspicacity
around lissom, sagging branches
of the decorticated core
that we once layered
prolix sentiments about
our fomented partnership
our extemporated life
has subluxated suddenly
at critical mass
we've lost the quiddity
that cynosure we emptied
copious amounts of wasted
sustenance into
the epicenter of
erroneous ventures
we were too
sightless to prevent
our squandered prosperity
has been defenestrated
left to decay on truculent streets
lugubrious in small dejected heaps
we have surceased our meanings
left only with loghrrea and persiflage
vacuous but for vapid posturing
and useless, non-sensical
ramblings
Damn, I had no idea what a lot of those words meant... I'd read a few and thought I knew some in their contexts, but others were... woosh... over my head lol.
But as you said, that was the point. Ha.
I liked your first and last strophes the most--they had the most crystal ideas and images to me.
I wondering if you meant cantations rather than cant, it seemed the brevity somehow conflicted. And then I even think the title could be
Circumlocomotion because this didn't go anywhere but around in a circle, exactly as you suggested.
But I like it in a strange and luxurious way, to be or not to be is not the question. It was and you were there. Love to love and mouth to mouth and elsewhere, who knows?
Oh please don't take me seriously, my jest is only to leave a mark and footprint that I came and saw. Lovely and loquacious, lustable, lingering, lash of lip-ped fervor.
Yes, the ending did suit this piece. Pointless ramblings. Although it sounds more in the context of a relationship, what it really calls to mind for me is the current administration. Although...THE DEMOCRATS RETOOK BOTH HOUSES OF CONGRESS!! But back to the write. I had to whip out my trusty dictionary for about a quarter of the poem, which makes the reading a tad choppy. But that's merely because I haven't reached higher education. It's not my favorite of yours, but it makes a point. Speaking of nonsensical ramblings...
Submission Name: Circumlocution
