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    dots Submission Name: California Closeness, followed Nevada never was...dots
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    Author: haileebobailee
    ASL Info:    18/F/NV
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 30/41/15
    Words: 294
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 863
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       I wrote this poem after boy told me everything I wanted to hear and then screwed me over.


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    dotsCalifornia Closeness, followed Nevada never was...dots
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    A hotel and hand holding
    Got us here,
    Kissing in the dark.

    Willing to take it too far
    We did,
    And as you reached
    For my belt,
    I reached for a grasp
    On reality

    The phone rang
    And I knew it was her
    I didnít answer
    Instead I let you take me,
    Then finish with a kiss.

    The lights hurt
    My eyes
    As I fixed my hair
    And you sat next to me

    She knocked on the door,
    You let her in,
    And it was over.

    We played Kings Cup,
    And I touched your leg,
    While you shrugged me off.

    She asked me what happened
    I didnít lie,
    Tears fell from her eyes
    As she left me alone

    I said I was sorry
    But kissed you at dinner,
    To tell her fuck you,
    I win.

    It was a happy goodnight,
    But the next morning
    Was ignorance
    In the form of sleep.

    You didnít touch me,
    No words spoken,
    But the other boy was kind,
    And his touch was warm

    It made you mad,
    So I pushed him off,
    But when you didnít care
    I pulled him back

    I laid on your shoulder,
    Stared in your eyes,
    And saw nothing,
    But you kissed me
    When we got home,
    Giving me false hope.

    Now we donít talk,
    Our words lost
    In a Myspace message
    And one silly phone call.





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