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    dots Submission Name: Ignite Wendeseldots

    Author: Porcelaine
    ASL Info:    27/F/Croatia
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 880/703/256
    Words: 225
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsIgnite Wendeseldots

    Might this path not a stream tear my sorrows from safety
    'Fore I tremble through the sickness that has ventured far
    I have been vengance
    I have grown to the chastity of my own oblivion
    There is no madness to be found amongst the disfigured
    We ARE madness
    And it trembles

    Burn, I say!
    When all the echoes receed through the halls
    I have craved, and never knew
    I was denying thee a sacrifice
    Such a labyrinth of pain is a well of illusions
    Drowning is sweet but the copper taste is bitter
    And we're marching
    And it trembles

    Whereas that which I sought has sounded like a carnage
    Sylphaen black, I now concur to thee my liege
    Marble and torment, what is thy sacrament
    Rebel I'm not, but maybe a stray
    Have thee another gate to open for me
    There on my palm lies a swan in my chains
    And mercy deprived
    It trembles

    Spurt me of tempests greying sacrilicious
    Hush me of the softest of eventide sounds
    Why would thee unleash me now, I ask
    When heart strings creed thy Virtuoso
    Sing to me the sweetest torment, I will gladly scream for thee
    Much as used I am to scream as crying shaded pleasure
    Now master
    As I tremble

    Submitted on 2006-11-09 15:38:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like your poetry. They give me a feeling that you have been hurt in your time, and your feelings just wrote themselves on paper. I like this poem alot. The title intregued me and your words brought forth a full description.
    Your very talented. Keep it up

    | Posted on 2006-11-16 00:00:00 | by coldxaura. | [ Reply to This ]
      It is not madness - just beauty. We are not able to tell madness from "normality"... ;)

    I'm really impressed by your developing ability to create such great metaphors like :

    "There on my palm lies a swan in my chains"
    | Posted on 2006-11-10 00:00:00 | by Non-Sens-Uality | [ Reply to This ]
      Madness???? yes.

    Madness that sent chills down my back. This awsome write held my attention as it crawled up my neck.

    can't wait to read more of your work.

    | Posted on 2006-11-09 00:00:00 | by illusions35904 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is madness, I shy away from the dark stuff.
    it always has me running for a the light. I can not write what I do not have in me. I admire those who can write what I can not.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2006-11-09 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      Again, arcane, but full of huge and roaring poetic images...well done! ( you have written here "concur to" when it shoud be "concur with")....excellent vocabulary (sylphean? of or relating to sylphs??) Bravo!!
    | Posted on 2006-11-20 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]

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