The pure pain of this piece shows me that you have been in this situation or been close to someone that was in this situation. Whichever happens to be true I am sorry for noone deserves that much pain. The piece also shows your ability to write a variety of different feelings into your poetry.
Well I can't realy say anything that hasn't been said, yes an amazing write, you capture pain and sorrow so well.
You have a comment that this is about an abused child, yet as I can see where the reader could think that I personally can see many stories could be played from this work.
The imagery and obliqueness of the wording makes for such a powerful piece. I love the way you lead with emotion not with facts.
May I ask? It would be an honour if you could give me a hint or just some advice on how to portray emotion as you do. If, as has been suggested, it comes all from exerience I apologise and do not wish to ask any more.
This write brought tears to my eyes This is so sad I didnt know you were referring to an abused child until the very end Thats when the tears started to flow You did an incredible job with this If this happenend to you I know you feel much better after putting your thoughts into words Brilliant write!!! I will be Praying for you my Friend God Bless Ron
Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think Thank You Ron