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    dots Submission Name: Confused Seagulldots
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    Author: Lisa Milligan
    ASL Info:    48/F/VA
    Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 38/47/21
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 1040
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    Bytes: 880



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       Just more mother separation anxiety, but this is meant to be funny/silly/goofy.


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    dotsConfused Seagulldots
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    I know ultimately Iíll get over this
    But when he leaves me for college
    Iím going to end up just one big puddle on the ground
    One big, deep, rippling puddle
    The ripples will be big enough to register as waves
    Sand will start accumulating around me
    Iíll probably even attract my very own seagull
    Who will circle around and dive in
    Looking for fish
    And repeatedly come up empty saying
    ďI got nuthiní ď
    Poor thing
    Because he wonít be diving into an ocean
    Heíll be diving into me
    Big, wet, empty me
    An idiot mother who loves her son
    Just too damn much
    Sigh, oh well, the best is yet to come
    Iím sure by the time of his college graduation day
    I will have pulled myself together

    I just hope I donít drip all over everything




    Submitted on 2006-11-09 16:04:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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