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    dots Submission Name: When?dots

    Author: Emerging Soul
    ASL Info:    48/VERY female/Wisconsin
    Elite Ratio:    4.36 - 1240/1114/244
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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        Sometimes love happens when you aren't seeking it...yet it takes you over just the same. It can start out as an attraction, or a kinship, or a smile; and before you know it you are drowning inside of it and wondering when you'd jumped in...

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    When did this need sneak up on me?
    Growing somewhere deep inside my soul
    Hiding its face until just the right moment
    Haunting me with it's shadowed form
    Making me ache for you

    When did this love consume me?
    Growing from friendship
    Changing into something much much more
    Touching something deep within me
    Giving my heart wings to fly

    When did this joy release me?
    Knocking down walls so carefully built
    Offering me a world I had ceased to hope for
    Providing me with a safe haven for my love
    Giving me back my smile

    When did this miracle happen?
    This feeling of knowing another soul
    So intimately, so openly, so completely
    And this desire I feel reawakened
    Each time you speak my name


    Submitted on 2004-05-28 08:34:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      lovely, your poetry is quite exquisite.... everything flowed and run very well, word choice was good. Hmm I often ponder that myself.... as I said in this one song:
    "When does friendship turn into love?"
    uhhh... there was more, can't remember it, anyway. ~Cora
    | Posted on 2004-05-28 00:00:00 | by Cora Windover | [ Reply to This ]
      i love how it seems you question yourself on such deep matters of the heart. it's so true that sometimes things simply seem to " sneak" up on you!
    | Posted on 2004-05-28 00:00:00 | by Dandan | [ Reply to This ]
      You make the reader work (too hard?) to understand the phrasing that goes with a relationship of this nature.
    Punctuation is a dirty word and I'm typing this sucking on a lysol popsicle...
    However, try this:

    When did this need sneak up?
    It grew, somewhere deep inside my soul,
    hiding its face 'til just the right moment,
    haunting me with it's shadowed form
    and making me ache for you.

    When did this love consume?
    Growing from friendship
    then changing into something much, much more.
    Touching something deep within me,
    Giving a heart six wings to fly upon.

    When did such joy release this soul?
    Knocking down walls so carefully built,
    offering a world no longer hoped for
    and providing a haven for this love.
    Giving back a smile.

    When did this miracle happen?
    This knowing of another soul
    who so intimately, so openly and completely
    has awakened this desire
    why, each time you speak this name...

    No 1st lady here (sorry: 1st person) but that makes it ours, not yours...

    Have a good weekend.
    | Posted on 2004-05-28 00:00:00 | by Awkward | [ Reply to This ]

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