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    dots Submission Name: PLEASE (let me go)dots
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    Author: L.L.COLLINS
    ASL Info:    25-ORLANDO, FL
    Elite Ratio:    4.57 - 172/147/36
    Words: 228
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 946
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1379



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       this poem is about hurting someone you love but no so much on purpose but insted like against your will like you can't controll haveing to do thing terrrible things you have to do


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    dotsPLEASE (let me go)dots
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    PLEASE,
    Donít waist your time loving me.
    Iím just the debris of a tragic travesty.
    Iím like a voyager plane
    crashed in to the sea,
    Or a passion flame
    Smokey in the breeze.
    Some love tipped me over
    and poured me empty,
    Then left me in ties
    to die in misery.
    I know it wonít be easy
    to break these chain loose,
    But spare your heart
    and save your love
    for someone loving you.
    Oh so far like a diamond star
    hiding behind the moon
    Iím everything you ever dreamed
    and then Iím gone to soon.
    Iím a snow flake down your face
    through the mid days of June ,
    Donít let this Mirage
    deceive what is the truth.
    Deep within find the strength
    to turn and let me go,
    The rain is only called to fall
    so patient flowers can grow,
    Donít let this break shake your faith
    Or cage your heart away,
    Thereís still some love far away
    waiting for your grace.
    But Iím broken
    Iím burned,
    And Iím left out In the cold,
    I canít risk holding you close,
    It might lead to missing you so,
    Or crying while wishing you close,
    Or begging you not to go ,
    or praying your legs were broke.
    SO PLEASEÖÖ
    Let me go.




    Submitted on 2006-11-09 17:09:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow.....very nice. I'm really becoming a fan of yours. I can feel EXACTLY what this poem is saying. I went through this myself not too long ago. I know what it feels like when you know you're no good for the person, but you know they love you and that you love them. You try to tell them, warn them that you aren't what you could be, that you are just a shell of what was there, but they don't care they say. They will get through it. But reality is you hurt them because you don't want to let them go once they realize it. This is very well written and I'm really starting to take an interest in your stuff.
    | Posted on 2008-10-15 00:00:00 | by FlickerofHope | [ Reply to This ]
      HONESTLY, I'M TIRED OF YOU SETTLING FOR LESS. I BELIEVE ME AND ASHLEY FEEL THE SAME WAY ABOUT YOUR WRITING AND WISH YOU'D REACH FOR MORE. HOW MANY OTHER WRITERS ON HERE CAN EVOKE SUCH EMOTION AND TRUTH THROUGH THESE WRITINGS? IT'S TIME TO BLESS THE ENTIRE WORLD WITH YOUR POWERFUL AND INSPIRING WORDS, FOR REAL. LET'S THINK ABOUT THIS, REALISTICALLY.


    XOXOXOXO
    | Posted on 2006-12-03 00:00:00 | by UNIQUEWOODS69 | [ Reply to This ]
      I think I'm in love with you!!! You're poetry just reaches into my soul and grabs a hold and wont let go.. I love it... Thanks for writing some new stuff for me... You know I love reading anything you have to write...~Ashley~
    | Posted on 2006-11-09 00:00:00 | by redeemer | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow... I really like your writing style. There really isnt a thing I would change about it. I am going to add it to my favorites and for sure check out your other work. Basically you can expect a stalker. lol. Keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2006-11-09 00:00:00 | by Thornful Rose | [ Reply to This ]


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