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    dots Submission Name: Can you find me?dots
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    Author: Thornful Rose
    ASL Info:    23-female-California
    Elite Ratio:    3.74 - 141/186/49
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 806
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 850



    Description:
       To all the depressed people. The ones who take the capsules. -Atmosphere


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    dotsCan you find me?dots
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    What I want to know is,
    Can you really find me?
    I lost myself so long ago,
    and now who knows,
    where the winds have blown me.

    What I am in need of,
    Is someone to come and find me.
    But with each attempt
    someone else is left beside me.

    Together.

    Seperate.

    Lost.

    I cry a thousand tears,
    and stain the world
    in which I have created.
    Stuck in my illusions,
    that this is what my fate is.

    I may not have a family,
    but atleast I have someone
    on whom I can depend.
    willing to be lost
    just to save a friend.

    To all of you.
    Lost.
    To the ones who tried to save me...
    I am here beside you.
    and maybe one day you can find me.




    Submitted on 2006-11-09 21:32:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'd have to agree with some of the other comments. It is a little creepy and haunting. But it's also a cry for help. That's what I get out of this poem. The person in this poem wants to be saved and helped. They're lost with no where to turn. You descibed it very well. I can relate to this one.

    ~Piper
    | Posted on 2006-12-16 00:00:00 | by PiperH | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem is strangely haunting. it's as if you've known someone all your life yet you really havent a clue what's going on in their life. i loiked this poem a lot. however, i do think this piece got a bit off trac with this stanza:
    I may not have a family,
    but atleast I have someone
    on whom I can depend.
    willing to be lost
    just to save a friend.
    everything else seems to be speaking about how no one really seems to be able to "find you" and yet this part talks about this person having a friend who is dependable and always there.

    nevertheless, i liked this poem. keep it up
    | Posted on 2006-12-16 00:00:00 | by moonlitsky | [ Reply to This ]
      This is lovely, Rose! It adresses the longing we all have for someone to see our secret pain and to be loved for "our real selves"!
    | Posted on 2006-11-10 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      There is something creepily familiar aboot this poem. The sense of misdirection, or the lack of any direction whatsoever. But a good write indeed!!!
    | Posted on 2006-11-10 00:00:00 | by Silenced poet | [ Reply to This ]
      Lack of any direction indeed. I suppose that's what

    'Together.

    Seperate.

    Lost.'

    is all about.

    'I am here beside you.
    and maybe one day you can find me.'
    was my favourite part of it.

    In deed,
    Nobody.
    | Posted on 2006-11-10 00:00:00 | by Lacrimosa | [ Reply to This ]


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