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    dots Submission Name: Can you find me?dots

    Author: Thornful Rose
    ASL Info:    23-female-California
    Elite Ratio:    3.74 - 141/186/49
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 806
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       To all the depressed people. The ones who take the capsules. -Atmosphere

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    dotsCan you find me?dots

    What I want to know is,
    Can you really find me?
    I lost myself so long ago,
    and now who knows,
    where the winds have blown me.

    What I am in need of,
    Is someone to come and find me.
    But with each attempt
    someone else is left beside me.




    I cry a thousand tears,
    and stain the world
    in which I have created.
    Stuck in my illusions,
    that this is what my fate is.

    I may not have a family,
    but atleast I have someone
    on whom I can depend.
    willing to be lost
    just to save a friend.

    To all of you.
    To the ones who tried to save me...
    I am here beside you.
    and maybe one day you can find me.

    Submitted on 2006-11-09 21:32:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'd have to agree with some of the other comments. It is a little creepy and haunting. But it's also a cry for help. That's what I get out of this poem. The person in this poem wants to be saved and helped. They're lost with no where to turn. You descibed it very well. I can relate to this one.

    | Posted on 2006-12-16 00:00:00 | by PiperH | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem is strangely haunting. it's as if you've known someone all your life yet you really havent a clue what's going on in their life. i loiked this poem a lot. however, i do think this piece got a bit off trac with this stanza:
    I may not have a family,
    but atleast I have someone
    on whom I can depend.
    willing to be lost
    just to save a friend.
    everything else seems to be speaking about how no one really seems to be able to "find you" and yet this part talks about this person having a friend who is dependable and always there.

    nevertheless, i liked this poem. keep it up
    | Posted on 2006-12-16 00:00:00 | by moonlitsky | [ Reply to This ]
      This is lovely, Rose! It adresses the longing we all have for someone to see our secret pain and to be loved for "our real selves"!
    | Posted on 2006-11-10 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      There is something creepily familiar aboot this poem. The sense of misdirection, or the lack of any direction whatsoever. But a good write indeed!!!
    | Posted on 2006-11-10 00:00:00 | by Silenced poet | [ Reply to This ]
      Lack of any direction indeed. I suppose that's what




    is all about.

    'I am here beside you.
    and maybe one day you can find me.'
    was my favourite part of it.

    In deed,
    | Posted on 2006-11-10 00:00:00 | by Lacrimosa | [ Reply to This ]

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