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    dots Submission Name: Deathdots

    Author: Silenced poet
    ASL Info:    21/male/oregon
    Elite Ratio:    2.54 - 52/41/21
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
    Total Views: 943
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 980

       Dude, yeah, you know it's true.

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    Tears fall upon the ground in vain,
    memories of pain so lost.
    He can not keep his rage at bane,
    no actions come without a cost.

    HE fears an end that's not his own,
    but picks a life of thorns.
    Hoping someday soon he'll die,
    and rise again newborn.

    If only reality were dreams,
    and ended with one wink.
    He'd gladly see his sarrows fade,
    and change his life from meek.

    There'd be no splender not his own,
    no mountain peek too high.
    He'd never want to face the blade,
    he'd never want to die.

    But dreams are that, and nothing more,
    and his pain is truly just.
    The ache of guilt wont stay with death,
    like him it turns to dust.

    Farewell to you poor tortured soul,
    your agony soon ceases.
    As death I help you leave this world,
    and leave behind the pieces.

    Submitted on 2006-11-10 03:57:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i liked it Alot!! :D

    i'm even gonna add it to my favs

    good work
    | Posted on 2007-01-27 00:00:00 | by mystic_angel | [ Reply to This ]
      DUDE. thats awsome.
    | Posted on 2006-11-30 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]
      First of all WOW!!!!!

    I really like this. I have added it to my favs. Second I really like the way to me it read from almost a reaper's point of view. But somehow from his point of view as well. You did an awesome job of showing his pain and his wish and his ultimate decision.

    GReat write!!

    | Posted on 2006-11-11 00:00:00 | by trynfinity | [ Reply to This ]

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