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    dots Submission Name: My Souldots
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    Author: Vampiric Death
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    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMy Souldots
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    If you could see
    into my soul,
    Would your mind
    remain whole?
    Would you run
    away with fear,
    Or look at me
    with a sneer?
    Would you see me
    as being vile,
    Or look at me
    and flash a smile?
    Is it likely
    that I am kind?
    Is paradise
    within my mind?
    Would you want
    to run and hide?
    Doth great evil
    in me reside?
    I hope it becomes
    known to you:
    Only good
    lasts in me true.




    Submitted on 2006-11-10 08:39:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think I'm evil too :) lol so this looks great to me. I dunno if someone would survive a roadtrip down my own soul. Great rhyme Oklahoma Will :). Simple words but a creative idea and a great style.
    | Posted on 2006-11-13 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      Still alive I see...? I really like the whole "would you judge me concept" really turn me into another direction. I suck @ giving comments so bad man! I'm just odd...but I really got the whole set up and wished for more...
    | Posted on 2006-11-10 00:00:00 | by Twisted | [ Reply to This ]


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