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    dots Submission Name: Our time is overdots
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    Author: dgnofdarkness
    ASL Info:    18/Male/Springfield, IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 78/103/25
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 623
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       Something i wrote when i found something out. I'm not going to say too much because people who know me might put the puzzle together.


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    Time is out,
    I see you no more,
    Yet vision of beauty,
    My heart still adores.

    I know I have lost you,
    You are seen no more,
    Forever, you know,
    My heart will endure.

    I know of your mistreatment,
    My discovery to you unknown,
    Tears flood my eyes,
    At that thought alone.

    For I wished to defend you,
    Shield you from all harm,
    If only you would tell,
    No reason for alarm.

    My heart you alone hold,
    This shall always be true,
    Even with what happened,
    I belong to only you.

    I failed at my task,
    Forgive at your will,
    The penalty unknown,
    You tell me nothing still.

    Thought the deed unimaginable,
    They committed it still,
    Their sick twisted minds,
    Exist at their will.

    If my objective was obtained,
    No more would you fear,
    Since their existence,
    Would no longer be here.

    Your heart is pure,
    What happened should never,
    Please remain pure,
    Through out forever.




    Submitted on 2004-01-28 20:40:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      mmmm. Women retain hurt big time. You probably didn't do anything wrong, though it feels like you think you screwed up big time. What I really like is how you maintain your rhythm even when you completely dispense with rhyme. Well done. Most people never manage to find that balance between using the rules and knowing when to toss them out the window. Keep it up! <><
    | Posted on 2004-02-05 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]
      wow.... the ending was what got me because in your mind if you want you can remain pure and that's a wonderful thought to hold on to love it
    | Posted on 2004-01-28 00:00:00 | by Soulraven | [ Reply to This ]
      Good poem. I feel you are blaming yourself somewhat for whatever happened to this loved person.Not by any action of yours, but by not being there for her when she needed defending.I like the ending; it shows how much you care...no matter what you still care deeply for her and urge her to stay pure of heart (as you view her yet) forever. I see that as meaning , no matter what happened to her physically, to you she is still the same inside...and you are reminding her of that..It is very touching , bittersweet yet uplifting at the end. Thanks, Silver
    | Posted on 2004-01-28 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      nice poem.. its deep, tells a story of many of my end of relationships nice work!
    | Posted on 2004-01-28 00:00:00 | by webmaster | [ Reply to This ]



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