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    dots Submission Name: snowdots

    Author: annie smith
    ASL Info:    20/f
    Elite Ratio:    5.26 - 75/61/24
    Words: 46
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 931
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 355

       i wrote this during the first snow of the year this year.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    Falling and swirling
    Spinning and twirling
    A blanket of white
    Formed over night

    Wild, fierce, blowing air
    Whipping cheeks o so fair
    A hypmotizing scene
    A bitter fiend

    Dancing they go
    A marvolus show
    The Performers? Why the snow!
    Never seasing their swirling flow

    Submitted on 2006-11-11 14:42:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a cute sort of write....

    Quite short and sweet.

    You have got the rhyme and meter well..........

    I'm glad you felt like composing a poem on this wonderful aspect of snow.........

    I simply love winter ...and snow adds a special charm to it.

    Write on!
    | Posted on 2007-11-19 00:00:00 | by mdsouza | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes I like this one too, I really like snow, even though I've never seen it.. Well actually I have, when I was two but I don't remember.. :C
    Very nice, very nice!
    | Posted on 2007-10-24 00:00:00 | by Broken-lands | [ Reply to This ]
      ok... i apologise for such a short statement previously... my favorite is the ending because it seems to portray nature as a participant in willfull action. I relate to this because it is how i see the world. The 'individuality' of pantheistic elements.. I would really like to here more from you in this respect... perhaps because it is my favorite subject...
    | Posted on 2007-01-04 00:00:00 | by blackbird | [ Reply to This ]
    | Posted on 2007-01-04 00:00:00 | by blackbird | [ Reply to This ]
      it's good...
    | Posted on 2006-12-27 00:00:00 | by blackbird | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this very much, i liked the wording u used, and how it flowed well,

    "Dancing they go
    A marvolus show
    The Performers? Why the snow!
    Never seasing their swirling flow"

    I especially liked these lines, the metafors and how u set it up, brilliant,

    However I think that if you rewrited it, and made it longer, still the same wording,.

    You could make something really big out of it,,

    Its really good, keep writing..
    | Posted on 2006-11-19 00:00:00 | by -=Bass=- | [ Reply to This ]
      Snow falls
    It covers everything in white
    If there is happiness
    It decorates it beautifully
    It covers it gently
    Snow falls
    | Posted on 2006-11-16 00:00:00 | by betrayedprince | [ Reply to This ]
      Snow SUCKS. Okay? Hahahha. Try shovelling it. EVERYDAY. lol.

    Good poem though.

    -- Jason Clement
    | Posted on 2006-11-12 00:00:00 | by Jason_Clement | [ Reply to This ]
      Write more of this! Snow is wonderful.
    | Posted on 2006-11-12 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
      Ha! This is really wonderful, Annie! It has great rhyme and meter; makes me feel like I could just go out and play in the snow!
    | Posted on 2006-11-11 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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