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    dots Submission Name: Nostalgiadots
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    Author: LadyChaos
    ASL Info:    19/F/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.42 - 718/606/95
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    dotsNostalgiadots
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    I miss when my words had depth,
    and my messages were poignant.
    Time causes the appreciation of simple things,
    however it also feeds the nostalgia--
    the ever hungry,
    though deceivingly gentle beast.
    Some days, the smallest event
    triggers a tidal wave of memories:
    A wilting flower in a dusty vase
    On a mantle besided framed, faded photographs...
    A scent:
    Roses, chocolate, warm aromas from the kitchen...
    The dulcet tones of a song almost forgotten...
    The rain...
    Memories upon memories lapping at your heart,
    threatening to carry it out to sea
    Dangerous memories of better times
    Times of smiles, music, flowers and rain
    Of dancing and laughter
    Only dangerous because they paralyze the present
    With your eyes turned pastward,
    new memories are never born




    Submitted on 2006-11-11 15:07:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Beautiful. Very emotive, idillic and expressive. I love the lonf lines and the use of the vocabulary.
    | Posted on 2006-11-12 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a great write. I love the last few lines, where you talk about new memories not being able to be formed because the character is so stuck in the past. This was absolutely true. Memories do cause nostalgia a bit, but without looking forward, you'll always be stuck in those memories...am I right?

    Let me know:)
    Great write,
    Lia
    | Posted on 2006-11-11 00:00:00 | by Glassy Eyed | [ Reply to This ]


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