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    dots Submission Name: trick or treat?dots
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    Author: shaman
    ASL Info:    32/m/Holland,MI
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 821/406/72
    Words: 293
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 880
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    Description:
       Just a first draft of a rant spawned from hearing about trunk or treat.
    enjoy.


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    dotstrick or treat?dots
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    what happened to halloween?
    doning masks and roaming streets
    Children asking trick or treat?
    But merely seeking candy

    Parental concerns for safety
    Have placed the festivities
    In churches and shopping centers

    Warm and sheltered, children enter
    Conviently recieving more candy
    And burning fewer calories;
    Capitalism at it's finest

    Diabetes and obesity
    are on the rise
    Now we've decided
    Fresh air and exercise
    Are too risky to be
    Activities for our children
    It seems
    Parents are unwilling or unable
    To provide supervision

    Prison stripes and archetypes
    Are far less frightening indoors
    We've taken out the effort
    And gone straight to the reward

    Glory is slowly
    Being murdered in this world
    A stranger's kindness can't be trusted
    Or so we're taught as boys and girls

    Diversity it seems
    Has become a dangerous thing
    We put on costumes daily
    In the hope that they might bring
    Some much needed excitement
    To simple little lives
    We block violent content from our TV's
    Then go home and hit our wives

    Perhaps we've been misguided
    Though some fears are justified
    At what point does parental paranoia
    Remove the joy from children's lives?

    Avoiding such dangers might
    Keep our children safe
    But what's the point of living
    In a prison bound with chains
    Restrained by the possibility
    They might be taking risks

    Perhaps the fear of HIV
    Will deprive them of their first kiss
    Perhaps attending home school
    Will prevent loss of friendship
    Perhaps the fear of drowning
    Will keep them from skipping stones over water
    Or perhaps we'll realize our folly
    And grant more freedom to our sons and daughters.










    Submitted on 2006-11-12 15:43:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow that was wicked cool....keep writing!
    | Posted on 2008-04-22 00:00:00 | by Kornfreakinabox | [ Reply to This ]
      Great society poem, I really love the end, it makes you think about whats really going on. No changes I would really make, just like I always say, I can never find a flaw with any of your work, but I guess thats my problem. Great flow, great imagery, blablablabla. yeah.
    keep it up
    flora
    | Posted on 2007-03-06 00:00:00 | by blankscreen | [ Reply to This ]
      A very big issue to talk about. Good writng. It seems like you gave this alot of thought.
    | Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by black rose13 | [ Reply to This ]
      This isn't really my cup of tea, as far as the reason it was written, however that didn't stop me from reading it through. I thought it was interesting, and was more of a persuasive poem, or atleast stating your opinion, I suppose it wasn't really trying to persuad per say. Anyways, it was nice to read something that wasn't just another love poem, and your almost monologue like writing was also a nice mix up.
    | Posted on 2007-02-07 00:00:00 | by Ygi | [ Reply to This ]
      This is in your journal, right? I read it there as well, and I must say I heartily concur. You've hit on all the reasons parents shelter their children even more these days: unwilling/uncaring, unable, or overprotective.

    (mine were the third type.)

    What does it all mean? A reflection of the times? Of isolationism and Amercian foreign policy and fear on an individual level? I think maybe all...

    In keeping children safe and alive, some have forgotten to let them live.

    (Don't worry. When they go off to college they'll let it all out... just think: all that repressed desire to do crazy things just BAM! .... an entire generation at once. Won't that be something?)
    | Posted on 2006-11-13 00:00:00 | by lukewarm | [ Reply to This ]


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