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    dots Submission Name: Fight Onwarddots
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    Author: Mykquillion
    ASL Info:    20/M/NEB
    Elite Ratio:    4.25 - 109/124/41
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsFight Onwarddots
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    The rain trickles on my head.
    Cough after cough,
    As the sickness spreads.

    She walks by my side,
    Grasping my hand
    As we walk through
    The crowded streets.

    Pleading for help,
    To anyone that would listen.
    As always, there is no response.

    “Keep your head up.”
    I say to stop her head from dipping.
    She sighs.

    The world has turned its back
    On those so unfortunate.

    Because we do not have a house
    That means we are not humans.
    But you have made your choice.
    Leave us to die.




    Submitted on 2006-11-13 01:28:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      icy chill poem. open some peoples eyes with the good topic.

    Because we do not have a house
    That means we are not humans.
    But you have made your choice.
    Leave us to die.


    the harsh realty straight up.
    | Posted on 2006-11-27 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      Social reality where saddness never ceases to intrude. It's a carnage. This i a great piece unmasking more then it should for the people with conscience and money.
    | Posted on 2006-11-13 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]


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