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    dots Submission Name: The Enddots
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    Author: AngelinDisguise
    ASL Info:    23/F/AUS
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 133/171/100
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 497
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 710



    Description:
       This Is Just A Random Thing I Wrote About My Bf Breakin Up With Me I Know i Can Be Improved But Atm I Dont Know How


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    dotsThe Enddots
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    I Opened Up To You
    I Showed You Love
    You Threw It Back
    Denied My Love
    Together Forever
    Was How It Seemed
    A Whole 2 Months
    Didnt Mean Anything
    Now I Lay Here
    Alone At Nite
    Begging For Forgivness
    For Our Stupid Little Fights
    You Told Me The Worst Thing
    I Could Ever Hear
    "Your Just Like Her"
    Those Four Words
    Roll Over My Mind
    As I Think Of The Very Nite
    Not A Single Tear Fell From Your Eye
    As I fell To The Ground
    And Started To Cry
    You Walked Away Left Me Alone
    Once Again
    Im Back Were I Started
    No Longer The End





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      nice work~really conveys what your feeling about this [censored]head..lol sorry had to say it...I dont think men become as emotionally invested in us as we do them...and that sucks for everybody...oh well, what are you gonna do?
    dont waste your time on someone who cant appreciate you...take care Stacey :)
    | Posted on 2007-01-16 00:00:00 | by DesecratedDream | [ Reply to This ]


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