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    dots Submission Name: transformingdots

    Author: Thornful Rose
    ASL Info:    23-female-California
    Elite Ratio:    3.74 - 141/186/49
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 645
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    Shapes are transforming.
    Becoming things they have never known,
    like a life with a family.
    And a desire to act old.

    My life is transforming.
    I can't exactly tell you why.
    Maybe I finally am over my mothers passing,
    and my lack of a goodbye.

    My addictions are transforming.
    The ones which once were so strong,
    and now they are slowly disappearing.
    Have I finally realized they were wrong?

    My heart is transforming.
    Finally escaping an icy cold.
    Once exsisting in black depression,
    Now allows true emotions to be showed.

    Shapes are transforming.
    My life is transforming.
    My addictions are transforming.
    My heart is transforming.
    I am transforming.
    Who knows where I will go...

    Submitted on 2006-11-13 04:21:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      there were a few times where the rhyming got a little sloppy. it wasnt too bad, though. not too distracting. the more things change, the more things stay the same.

    i tip my hat and bid thee farewell.
    | Posted on 2006-11-15 00:00:00 | by PoeticNonsense | [ Reply to This ]

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