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    dots Submission Name: An Apology For A Broken Heartdots
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    Author: everafter
    Elite Ratio:    2.4 - 38/33/10
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       Something I wrote for the first boy who ever broken my heart.. and as an apology for breaking his.


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    dotsAn Apology For A Broken Heartdots
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    Crimson eyes of a lasting hurt
    
That chases back in time
    
His sweet half truths, the smell of his shirt
    
His fingers entiwned in mine
    

    
An explosive romance we tried to hurry
    
Ignoring reason and truth
    
Trying and failing to secretly bury
    
Our half-meant "i love you"s
    

    
Careless lips and damaged pride
    
Crushed and bruised us sore
    
A love tainted with mistrust and lies
    
Our hearts cannot ignore
    

    
Now here we are, in our world of stage
    
Years after a bitter farewell
    
Unable to forget the love we waged
    
That condemned our hearts to hell 
    

    
An "i'm sorry" that's true, yet inadequate
    
To give way for a gracious restart
    
But I hope my apology, however late
    
Could heal our broken hearts




    Submitted on 2006-11-13 06:24:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Awesome poem.
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    | Posted on 2006-12-13 00:00:00 | by Hate | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a great write. I think it can double not only as a poem but as a song (depending on if you like Finch or the Fray) you could definetly go either way with it. Having had my own troubles with the heart that is a great, touching ending and i hope that it did help.
    Keep smiling and writing.
    Awesome job.

    ~Chris
    | Posted on 2006-12-06 00:00:00 | by interstate88 | [ Reply to This ]
      woah. this is touching. i had a broken heart once. was with the guy for almost a year. and this poem of your reminds me of him.

    thank you.

    :] Mandi
    | Posted on 2006-11-30 00:00:00 | by Is this love? | [ Reply to This ]
      Kez, this is a lovely poem! The last two lines provide a dynamite ending to a a remarkable bit of love poetry!
    | Posted on 2006-11-13 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem had a perfect way of descrbing a relationship. Your rythm was right on, and your wording was perfect. Very good job. Keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2006-12-18 00:00:00 | by I_m not Broken | [ Reply to This ]



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