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    dots Submission Name: Decadent Beautydots
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    Author: Mykquillion
    ASL Info:    20/M/NEB
    Elite Ratio:    4.25 - 109/124/41
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsDecadent Beautydots
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    Her smile glows;
    Radiant and awe-inspiring.
    Lighting up entire caves.

    Her smile spreads;
    As contagious as yawning.
    Cannot help but be happy.

    Her smile comforts;
    Making landing as soft as a pillow,
    Through each of life’s trials.

    Her smile is all the matters;
    Yet sadly,
    She does not smile for me.
    She does not smile to me.




    Submitted on 2006-11-13 12:05:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      beautiful and tragic. i love it.

    Her smile spreads;
    As contagious as yawning.
    Cannot help but be happy.

    as contagious as yawing... amazing.

    good work

    J. Ackson Jr.
    | Posted on 2007-01-26 00:00:00 | by JAcksonJr | [ Reply to This ]
      this piece, in my mind, presents a dreamer who is repeatedly shoved back into reality. he wants to adore her beauty, her smile... then he remembers that it is not him that she smiles for. reminds me strongly of being a teenager. youre always wanting someone you cannot have, mainly because the person you want likes someone else. -sigh-
    its a good piece, i like the message it portrays to me.
    good write!

    - Michi
    | Posted on 2007-01-24 00:00:00 | by _Phoenix | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this one, I read it earlier, but didnt have time to comment. It reminds me of someone that one wants to have but can never truely have. Someone cares so deeply, they take joy in the smallest things, mostly overlooked, but are still not ever able have it.
    Your wordings and comparisons are just brilliant. :) They put the perfect touch to it.
    | Posted on 2007-01-18 00:00:00 | by dreamer37517 | [ Reply to This ]
      Was this written for the picture specifically? Would be even beter of you did the picture, the bit about canvas makes me think this.

    And if so...
    She looks like she is smiling to herself, your descriptions are accurate and pretty to bounce around off the tongue that talks in my head...don't know if that makes sense, ah well, no matter...I thought this was at the very least presented very well, lovely lovely.

    Jaz
    | Posted on 2006-11-13 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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