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    dots Submission Name: Nothingnessdots
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    Author: loveispain
    ASL Info:    23/f/ME
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 283/198/51
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 689
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    Description:
       I've already posted this once before...but I think it relates more to my life now than it did then...I just felt like posting it again. I don't know when my relationship became a thing of nothingness...and all I want is for there to be SOMETHING.....something to make me believe we still have a chance...or that proves he'd like us to even at least still have a chance. I love him....I'd just like a little flicker of something...to make me Believe...


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    dotsNothingnessdots
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    Tears slowly form in the corner of my eyes,
    My smile fades, and my heart rips at its seams.
    It's not the same as it was before.
    You tell me you love me,
    And your words, seem forced.
    The feeling once sensed behind them,
    Is replaced with emptiness,
    The bitter sound of nothingness.

    You're there, but then again, you're not.
    Through hundreds of miles of country,
    I see your eyes wander,
    I see your thoughts wander,
    And I feel your heart,
    Slipping further...and further,
    Away from mine.
    Then you speak, and I hear nothing but,
    The bitter sound of nothingness.

    Nothing's wrong, everything's fine.
    Say it over and over, hide from the truth.
    Tell me I'm crazy, tell me to forget it,
    But I won't ignore it.
    The marks on my face, from the slap
    Of everytime you open your mouth,
    Are imprinting...everlasting...still stinging with,
    The bitter sound of nothingness.




    Submitted on 2006-11-13 12:25:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      your poems are like songs we hear on the radio as we are going through something similar...and we can definitely relate...
    | Posted on 2011-04-30 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. its a really sad piece, and I am sorry you had to go through it. Honeslty I cant share the experiance with you because the only person I have ever really loved, I love right now. Beautiful piece, nothing I would change.

    ~flora
    | Posted on 2007-03-13 00:00:00 | by blankscreen | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem is very intense. I can tell the narrator is really hurt, I'm not sure if this actually happened to you or not. BUt I'm sorry if it did. I can tell this really hurt you/the narrator a lot, and their just venting all their feelings toward the person that hurt them.
    Great Write!

    STAY STRONG
    | Posted on 2006-11-14 00:00:00 | by SOS33 | [ Reply to This ]


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