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    dots Submission Name: Breakdots

    Author: Orin
    Elite Ratio:    4.27 - 93/97/43
    Words: 212
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1176
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       I have no idea what that is, but I wrote it during Basic, so I'll post it.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    I want to tear you apart
    And put you back together.
    I want to break down
    The walls of self consciousness.
    I want to tell you everything,
    Everything you fear, everything that you hate.
    I want to tell you that
    All the thoughts that
    Keep you up at night are true.
    Tell you that the world
    Really is an unjust place.
    I want to see you bleed and cry.
    I want to see you die.
    I want you to see
    All the things that I've seen.
    Go all the places that I've been.
    Feel all the pain that I have felt,
    And I want to hear you scream.
    I'd like to lie, and say it's a dream.
    But I'd rather tell you the truth.
    I'd like to tell you it's all ok,
    Instead, I want you to think for yourself,
    And I want you to make up your own mind.
    The reason I want to do all these things
    Is to see you be reborn, and take flight
    Like a Phoenix; to see that the world we live in is Cruel, but you don't have to be cruel or hide to survive.
    Because when you know all the rules of the game,
    Maybe you can actually win.

    Submitted on 2006-11-13 13:47:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      like this piece and its meaning..

    you need to see the world as it is...i cannot and will not sugar coat it for you...you have to live through the bad to appreciate the good..

    the world will sooner or later be cruel; you need to understand it in all its facets, good and bad...then you can decide how to approach it...

    nice wording in this...

    | Posted on 2011-05-15 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this. I don't know what it was about it but it was amazing. I love your style. But the subject is what captivated me. It seemed to have so much anger in the begining yet get softer in the end, like a father trying to explain to a young child why they were punished and that it was for their own good not because they hate them or something. I love the feel. Great piece, keep on writing.

    | Posted on 2007-03-05 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]

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