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    dots Submission Name: Reality.dots
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    Author: Orin
    Elite Ratio:    4.27 - 93/97/43
    Words: 313
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Serious
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    Description:
       The incoherent rantings of a deranged mind during Basic.


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    dotsReality.dots
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    It is said that every creature dies alone. Regardless of the path you choose, in death, there is nobody to hold your hand and help you through. You can be a doctor, saving lives all day and you can still die in a freak car accident. A drug lord, ruining lives instead of saving them can live happily to 70, and die of natural causes in his sleep. A judge, sentencing people to their doom, ending lives behind bars, fights cancer for 3 years and expires in his mansion, with noone but his servants for company.

    It's irrelevant what happens during your lifetime. What you do, or do not do for others. The only thing that is important is that you make yourself happy. That the time you spend on this planet is not spent in regret. On a cosmic scale our time is very short. If serving others makes you happy, do it. If not, be your own boss.

    Once you turn 18, you are in control of your own life. Not your parents, not your teachers, not your boss, you.

    People spend their time pissed off, they argue, they cry, they're depressed, they are self conscious. That kind of weakness, the possibility of your emotions taking over every action and decision you make, that makes these people feel even worse about themselves, miserable, even. What they need is a wake-up call. One of those 4:30 am ones. The one that jolts you from one reality to the other.

    The dream world, the one where everything is awful and bleak and everyone hates them, and reality, where everything is based soulely on your peception, which in turn is determined by your brain. You decide how bleak, depressing and dissapointing your life is. You decide how good it can be.

    You're in control of your life.




    Submitted on 2006-11-13 13:58:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Reality is so funny sometimes. You don't always know where to start where to end, who's in charge, who isn't. where your life is taking you, where you will end up dying.
    Life sometimes mocks you in the face at the same time wonders if you know when it is mocking you so that you can do something about it and change it or if you're going to stand in your little dark corner and isolate yourself from the world believing someone like superman will save you.

    i think in your piece you have made some valid statements about life although the control part i can debate you over the extent to which you are right. Let's just say social class doesn't always allow you to be in control of your life. And even if your parents no longer can tell you what you can or cannot do, society still has this voice whether directly ( other people who have more power than you) or indirectly ( that little voice inside your head that thought you the right from wrong).

    Other than that, Your thoughts seem to be very deep. Keep searching for that reality. There is so much more out there.

    Irina
    | Posted on 2007-03-14 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so crazy. Everything you just wrote hits the nail on the head on every thought I've had these last few weeks, so I can definitely relate to this. The way you write it also makes it seem less depressive than it could have been, had you used other words. I think you're use of "[censored]ty" ruins the picture a bit though, so I would suggest maybe trying to find a word to replace it with. It just gives the whole piece a wrong atmosphere to me than what the rest of the poem leads to.
    Great job though, this will definitely go on my favourites list.
    Take Care,
    -Natalia
    | Posted on 2006-11-13 00:00:00 | by Natalia Petro | [ Reply to This ]
      Certainly. This'll be taken into consideration.

    Thanks.
    | Posted on 2006-11-13 00:00:00 | by Orin | [ Reply to This ]


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