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    dots Submission Name: Wide awake at 2 AMdots

    Author: Poetic_tragedy6
    ASL Info:    25/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 114/155/74
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsWide awake at 2 AMdots

    I cannot sleep
    Thoughts of you flood my mind.
    Of times lost
    When you used to be mine.

    I go back to the memories
    So many we had
    Of the way we used to be
    I can't help but get so sad

    Your dark hair
    Those deep eyes
    All the things
    That once had me mesmirized

    We fell apart
    You left me broken
    Dying of a broken heart.

    I cannot breathe
    I miss you so much
    All I wish is for you to be with me
    To feel your touch

    So I toss and I turn
    Trying to escape my thoughts
    For sleep I yearn
    With each tick of the clock

    Finally I sleep
    My mind silenced it's screams
    But I can't even esacape
    Your in my dreams

    Submitted on 2006-11-13 15:12:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is very profound for someone so young. I used to write like this when I was your age. First luv hunh. Take heart though young, there will be more. There will be plenty more.

    As for the poem. Your flow is beautiful, there were a couple of ticks but the only thing I get from them is the thought that you just wrote this poem. You didn't think it out or plan it. You just wrote it.

    That shows your true skill.
    Good write.

    | Posted on 2006-11-15 00:00:00 | by sincere_silence | [ Reply to This ]
      I love it. It's the way I've felt lately almost to a tee. My bed's too big to sleep in and I can't stop my mind's running in circles. Well written poem and I'm really fond of it. Keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2006-11-14 00:00:00 | by MyWorld | [ Reply to This ]

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