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    dots Submission Name: The Princess and Himdots

    Author: fiery whisper
    ASL Info:    21/F/Bangladesh
    Elite Ratio:    5.13 - 51/49/33
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsThe Princess and Himdots

    Fabulous, the moon shine
    Lowly, the spirits whine
    An enchanting horse on the air
    Upon it the sooth sayer.

    Nightly, he does arrive
    Quietly, the spirits - five
    Wait for the princess of the dark
    As the silver creates a portrait so stark.

    Softly, whispers he
    Calmly, beckons she
    As the spirits await the meeting
    The owls pause their hooting.

    Loudly, struck thunder
    Prettily, fairies wonder
    As the spirits in unison begin to sing
    a poetry for the welcoming.

    Beautifully, on the circle
    Brightly, the stars twinkle
    The time has come, the time was here
    Her shadows whispered, she was near.

    Courtly, he waited
    Darkly, the prophecy stated
    For the silver to meet its end
    Lest the nightmares find the bend.

    Strongly, the tides high
    Happily, the fairies sigh
    Beneath the glory of the full moon
    The hours could not have been soon.

    Magically, appeared she
    Mesmerized, looked he
    As the twilight spread across the sky
    The princess had met her Rye.

    Submitted on 2006-11-14 03:56:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Loudly, struck thunder
    Prettily, fairies wonder
    As the spirits in unison begin to sing
    a poetry for the welcoming.

    This was so nice! I loved your elegant twist on the structure of the poem. Not something you see everyday. You write "cute" if that is the right way to say it. I get the feeling of pink little fairies flapping around on tiny wings, while a girl dances quietly in the backround of her own little fairytophia. But at the same time, it is mature! And very "myth-like"-

    Anyways, it was cute, short and nice to read. Your words fit together very nice both in rhyming and style. And you show a believable faith in your own work, you believe in what you have portraited. Its very good!

    Id be honored of you would take a look at my work, and maybe comment one?

    Be well,
    hugs from Norway
    | Posted on 2006-11-14 00:00:00 | by ChrystalR | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, there we go I want to be the first one leave a comment on a such an amazing poem.

    It is altogether one fo the greatest poems ever. Yes, I compare it with all the brilliant geniuses who ever existed. Including the ones, whose works I cannot live without - W. Blake, E.A Poe and Tennyson.

    I particularly am mesmerized by the old school rhyming and the classical appraoch to characters. Then the atmosphere and setting has this gothic touch to it, much like the poem Lenore - E.A. Poe. Not to mention the chracter of the princess is very viabrant. The texture of the poem having that Tennyson's era in it. You know, all those brilliance such as "The lady of Shallot" or "Ulessys". So I think it has all the brilliant elements.

    I like the tale, it is so original and so very touchy. It has all the beautiful elements of nature. the ideologies and the dreams are not missing either. It is very sweetly romantic and very dark too. Hence it makes a very strong point with all the senses and at the same time does not sacrifice any bit of it the "sappy" world.

    So overall I say that it is a flawless piece of writing at least from my poit of view. It is very mature and the characters are immaculately shown. It is indeed a very mature piece of writing with those little dreams and ideologies of a youth. It is ageless and in my humble opinion, timeless.

    Love it!

    love you and may i say "thanks"?

    peace love and empathy,

    | Posted on 2006-11-14 00:00:00 | by forestspirit | [ Reply to This ]

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