I loved the poem :) And since I can relate with the dreams bit, I found it particularly wonderful :) Also the ending, in which everything turns yellow is an analogy that I think I would use. So its totally my kind of a poem. Except I doubt I would have been able to write with the flourish that you did.
The way you used a bit of dialog at the beginning really gives the poem a catchy but interesting start. One thing that I did not understand was "In blood Ill surely pay the cost buy liberation from your chain". What does the reference to blood show? Another point that I wanted to make was I liked the way you stated that you'd walk through the valley of fire. Makes you sound super confident. And it also allows dreams to be in the winning team, so I liked it.
Submission Name: On the Yellow Blues of Fire
