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    dots Submission Name: My Letter To Youdots
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    Author: Glassy Eyed
    ASL Info:    17/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 550/427/187
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 186
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1163



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    dotsMy Letter To Youdots
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    A passing letter I wrote to you,
    Was placed inthe mail today.
    It held my name, address, and a single stamp.

    The letter was thin,
    Not much weight,
    So the postman sent it off.

    The you recieved my letter.

    Carefully opening it,
    Your eyes scanned its contents.

    Those blue eyes widened,
    Turning into endless seas of
    Vast, unmistakeable knowledge.

    "I love you,
    I love you more than you will ever know
    ever care to know,
    And I just can't take it anymore.
    I leave you with this letter,
    In hopes one day you could love me the way
    I love you."

    That was the last piece of mail
    That ever graced my mailbox.

    ____________________________________

    I moved to another state,
    And unbeknownst to me,
    You followed.

    You showed up at my door one day,
    Lifted me in your arms,
    And kissed me softly on the lips.

    "I love you,
    More than you will ever know,
    ever care to know."




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      I liked this piece. It makes you hope that the guy realizes what he is missing and comes to be with you. and apparently you are not one to dissapoint, or he is not one to dissapoint, it depends on weather or not this actually happened or not, but i shant ask, because it is none of my business... It made me miss my girlfriend though, we live about 45 minutes away from each other and only get to see each other on weekends, and we send letters... well... she sends letters, and i "show up at her door"...
    I hope that made a little bit of sense.
    Thanks for the read and keep at it
    Guermo

    (btw, 187 poems!!! thats a lot, i definately have to come back and look at more of your writings)
    | Posted on 2007-01-19 00:00:00 | by Guermo | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with Persephone, beautiful and very, very sweet, we get lost in the words which, of course, is whatevery poet sets out to do...quite excellent...bravo...bravo...bravo...Michael
    | Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh this is so sweet! I thought it would be a really sad poem at the beginning, but it makes me so happy at the very end. That is wonderful! You have a very talented way of creating suspense, and it makes the piece even more lovely! You just have to watch your grammar and you have a spelling mistake at the very beginning, but it really is a wonderful poem.

    Cheers,
    ~Persephone~
    | Posted on 2006-11-15 00:00:00 | by Persephone | [ Reply to This ]



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