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    dots Submission Name: Scrapped and Bruiseddots
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    Author: rAbit
    ASL Info:    18/m/Tx
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 84/91/38
    Words: 212
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Love
    Total Views: 101
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1028



    Description:
       about someone,
    curious curious.


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    dotsScrapped and Bruiseddots
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    Taken beyond the thought,
    of every moment, will it ever last?
    take my hand,
    try not to let go.
    This time around.
    aren't we all dead?
    scream of lusting color,
    gently graze your wrist,
    and as it all pours.
    imagine it all away...
    and open your eyes.
    kissing the silver,
    piercing through.
    another night,
    of selfish belonging.
    forced through incisions
    of panic, and screaming.
    will it ever end...?
    you let go, through all this time
    was there a moment of love
    through our silence recollection.
    dance in peril, and panic
    your gleaming...
    beauty and deceit,
    gladly deceased.
    kiss the silver, one last time
    in vibrant goodbyes.
    play dead, ever again...
    dragging thin lines,
    to hymns of sorrow.
    until forever....until forever......




    Submitted on 2006-11-14 18:49:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      First off I have a simple question: Is it supposed to be "scrapped" in the title or is it supposed to be "scraped?" Just curious and would like clarification.

    I love the vocabulary used in this poem. The words matched its dark theme quite well. I'm getting this sort of frantic tone in the poem, not only just depressed.

    Nice work and keep writing!

    Stygian
    | Posted on 2006-11-14 00:00:00 | by Stygian | [ Reply to This ]



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