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    dots Submission Name: No Matterdots
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    Author: dismentled
    ASL Info:    24/M/"South of Heaven"
    Elite Ratio:    4.13 - 617/549/200
    Words: 202
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 167
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1576



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       another one I found lingering


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    dotsNo Matterdots
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    I’m fucked up!
    It’s just a joke
    Like all that I do

    I’m stupid;
    But that’s ok,
    I’m smarter than you!

    I’m in pain
    But who cares?
    Everyone is anyway!

    I’m broken,
    I’ve fallen apart
    Left only decaying remains!

    I LAUGH, I CRY(I’m…
    WAS, BORN TO DIE!(…bleeding)
    I LIKE, I HATE(I’m…
    CHOOSING MY FATE(..scarring)
    I LOOSE, I WIN(I’m…
    A LIFE BUILT UPON SIN!(..hopeless)
    I LISTEN TO YOU(why?)
    STILL DON’T KNOW WHAT TO DO!(like you)

    I’m crazy insane,
    Something to laugh at
    Like all the things I do!

    I’m unappreciative
    But that’s doesn’t matter,
    I’m more greatful than you!

    I’m still lost
    But whatever right?
    Who isn’t anyway?!

    I’m shattered
    I’ve come apart,
    Nothing worthwhile remains!

    I LAUGH, I CRY(I’m…
    WAS, BORN TO DIE!(…bleeding)
    I LIKE, I HATE(I’m…
    CHOOSING MY FATE(..scarring)
    I LOOSE, I WIN(I’m…
    A LIFE BUILT UPON SIN!(..hopeless)
    I LISTEN TO YOU(why?)
    STILL DON’T KNOW WHAT TO DO!(like you)

    Pick me up
    Throw me away,
    Like you have before!

    Leave me shattered
    Leave me broken
    could have stopped this before!

    (but no one cares)
    just
    (no one cares)
    ...
    (no one Fucking' cares!)

    ABOUT ME!(including me….)





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      sweeet lyrics mann. I could hear it with some weed.

    i think u write real.

    its icy chill.


    peace

    Grim

    | Posted on 2007-07-31 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      i agree with ronswords, this poem was vert true, I really think that you are an excellent writer. uh...are you comparing yourself to someone, or are you comparing your life, like in your other poem 1 day? Are you trying to get someone alive to understand your life?

    Lots of potenial, it can go ANYWHERE.

    | Posted on 2006-11-14 00:00:00 | by Twisted | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow
    This write is so true
    To me you are referring to how anothers negativity towards you can not only bring you down to their level but it also can destroy any bit of self respect you have in yourself
    It is so sad that others feel that when they are angry or sad they have to bring other people into their sadness in order to enjoy life
    I like the way you wrote this a lot
    This is a write if you read quick shows just how painful you as the writer are
    Excellent Job
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think

    It has been awhile since Ive seen you around Im gllad you are contributing writes again
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-11-14 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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