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    dots Submission Name: 1 daydots
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    Author: dismentled
    ASL Info:    24/M/"South of Heaven"
    Elite Ratio:    4.11 - 619/553/204
    Words: 232
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 205
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1604



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       wrote this one awhile ago


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    dots1 daydots
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    i'm crying,
    but you wont see a single tear!

    i'm fighting,
    though my arms lay by my side!

    i'm living,
    the single benefit of pain!

    you were wrong
    it doesn't mean a thing...

    And I SCREEEAAAMMM!!!
    so silently
    filled with rage!
    though calm as can be
    hating, bleeding, crying
    despised...demised
    sweating, freezing, shaking
    tired of lies!

    lonely tired, frigid
    weak...frail
    broken, shattered, ridiculed
    drowning in myself!

    you don't know the story;
    but i'm wrong!?

    you don't even know me,
    but you know who i am?

    you know all the answers
    and asked no quetions!?

    don't bother hating me now
    this is a controlled reaction!

    And I SCREEEAAAMMM!!!
    so silently
    filled with rage!
    though calm as can be
    hating, bleeding, crying
    despised...demised
    sweating, freezing, shaking
    tired of lies!

    lonely tired, frigid
    weak...frail
    broken, shattered, ridiculed
    drowning in myself!

    And i feal myself breaking
    part of me doesn't care!
    feel my stomach sinking
    not sure my souls there...

    wasted, angry, loathing!
    feel i'm exploding!!
    dying, dying, dying, I'm
    dying, dying, dying, I'm dying,...




    Submitted on 2006-11-14 19:02:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      mad sweet lyrics dude. this is my fav line. its kickasss

    "don't bother hating me now
    this is a controlled reaction!"

    this is cool cuz u rote it just like how anyone feels when they let their feelings out only on the inside and not on the outside.

    and i like the part when u say ur not sure ur soul is there.


    peace

    Grim




    | Posted on 2007-08-14 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      So you had one day left to say everything that was to be said in your life, but being that you were trying to explain yourself to someone who doesn't understand, you scream out, trying to make them understand, and make truths out of lies. But you're tired of only getting yourself, and thus, drowning within yourself.

    Hmmm...very interesting.
    | Posted on 2006-11-14 00:00:00 | by Twisted | [ Reply to This ]


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