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    dots Submission Name: Dance in Continuancedots

    Author: Valle_Siddious
    ASL Info:    24/Male/Dystopia
    Elite Ratio:    2.51 - 93/94/41
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1024
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       NEW! I think i may be getting over the whole depressed poetry thing.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsDance in Continuancedots

    As i Take in a breath
    and caress my last thought,
    you make haste to the battle
    thata's already fought.
    We danced in continuance,
    lost but not speaking;
    Awed by the ignorence your
    lives are leaking.
    Cry without feeling to comfort
    the sad.
    Don't deal with depression.
    It's only a fad.
    Does the dark make us evil?
    What if satan wore white?
    Let us weep for the hopeless.
    They're losing the fight.

    Submitted on 2006-11-14 19:33:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      short and simple but its still so wonderful!
    | Posted on 2006-11-15 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]
      whoooh... you make me speechless with this one. it kind of makes me rethink the way we live.
    its very well written. the only typo I see is on the fourth line. I think it's supposed to be that's.
    Keep writing... you really are a tremendous poet.
    | Posted on 2006-11-14 00:00:00 | by Ali Marie | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes! A new one to read, yay! I love the ending of it especially, lol. It all flows very nicely, I feel. Talk to ya later! Be good, lol!

    | Posted on 2006-11-14 00:00:00 | by Ayane | [ Reply to This ]
      YES YESYES!!! i luv the line what if satin wore white!! i luv it.

    and it is so amazingly true that the hopeless are loseing.

    koodoes for you.

    *by the way...creepy pic...
    | Posted on 2006-11-14 00:00:00 | by Adden Lee | [ Reply to This ]
      if satan wore white. beautiful. wonderful. i love it. it's got great flow. brilliant imagry. like drinking kalua and cream. it's got a quiet deep undercurrent of dissatisfaction. keep it up
    | Posted on 2006-11-15 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]

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