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    dots Submission Name: justdots
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    Author: TheBlackFairy
    ASL Info:    18/female/Caldwell
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 32/29/15
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 803
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       this is just mostly random thoughts, not the best in my opinon, and probably littered with errors. o well hope you like it anyways


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    Just...
    Let the tears fall.
    Grab the phone and make the call.
    Say the words you know you hate.
    Step back and take a look at fate.
    Wonder why you feel this way.
    Question the lies you told today.
    Live your life and take the plunge.
    Try your best not run.
    Let him know how you feel.
    Hope that all he says is real.
    Dare to dream the things you do.
    Hope to god they believe in you.
    Close your eyes and embrace your fears.
    Stand up and face all your piers.
    Ask the questions that are on your mind.
    Search for things you'll never find.
    Never give up on what you believe.
    Don't turn around and leave.
    Forget the fighting and look for peace.
    Think of all the people you could meet.
    Embrace the optimism of the sun.
    Have your smile be remembered when your life is done.




    Submitted on 2006-11-14 23:03:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i likes the stream of consciouses method i think it lends to the honesty of the piece. i'm not a huge fan of the rhyme scheme but that's just me.

    "Grab the phone and make the call.
    Say the words you know you hate."

    these lines struck me in particular. that representation of what we to to make life easy by lying and placating those around us..

    very well done
    | Posted on 2007-11-15 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      A free flow of thoughts is nice. Kinda contradicting in places but that is the way it goes.I'm sure if you wanted you could disect it into new work with more meaning & feeling if you desired
    | Posted on 2006-11-16 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]


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