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    dots Submission Name: Harsh So Longdots
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    Author: Evil Jesture
    ASL Info:    22/m/wherever
    Elite Ratio:    3.14 - 165/201/93
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 877
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1072



    Description:
       Fear I have. I wish not to fight with others for this. I get into fights with the ones I love, but what happens if it is really goodbye


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    dotsHarsh So Longdots
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    Just hear me out
    I know its not perfect
    But let me just guide you through this episode
    I highly dought
    That you will understand where Im coming from

    Born at youth
    But to grow up and die so young
    I wish you would
    Understand where im coming from
    So when we fight
    You will no when to back down
    And when you know you win

    But our last fight we left
    And the nect thing I knew you were gone
    So I cannot apologise
    And you know you won

    I cant tell you that I still am in love
    That how am I to move on
    When you are down six feet under
    Last fight we had
    You didnt understand
    I only said what I did
    Cause I didnt want to see you walk out that door

    Goodbye is now said
    And it seems final this time
    since I cant see your smile again
    But only see your picture on the wall
    Why did you leave
    Without a goodbye
    But with harsh words painted on our souls




    Submitted on 2006-11-14 23:18:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      ok...nect should be next. but thats the only typographical error that i saw. it is sad if you think about it. what if this is the last time you see someone, and they died thinking you didnt love them? very touching, very thought provoking.

    i tip my hat and bid thee farewell.
    | Posted on 2006-11-15 00:00:00 | by PoeticNonsense | [ Reply to This ]


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