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    dots Submission Name: Love Song for a Cynic With Tourettesdots
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    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    58/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2779/1297/258
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 757
    Average Vote:    3.5000
    Bytes: 961



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       curse ye, Michael Stipe

    yewr songs are infectuous


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    dotsLove Song for a Cynic With Tourettesdots
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    this one goes out
    to the nun I love

    I can't miss if
    I toss this at her...
    behind

    true love divine
    was built to b*tch and whine

    this one goes out
    to the nun I love

    I've run out of words so I'll go...
    HIYAAAAAA-AHA-IYAHHHHH!!

    and again...
    HIYAAAAAA-AHA-IYAAAHHHRGGHH!!

    this one goes out
    to the none I love

    I'd stitch her lecturer's lips
    if I could find...
    the time

    cooing lovers swell
    like pigeons splitting hell

    this one goes out
    to the none I love

    why not?
    HIYAAAAAA-AHA-IYAHHRGGHHHH!!

    *cue guitar solo*

    *cue dancing bald fellow*

    *cue whirling stage presence
    and general chaos*

    *sell millions of records*

    ~finis~




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    ||| Comments |||
      Very very clever!
    I like the religious connotation you indirectly apply to the word nun not I think as a specific content but as a subliminal connotation of an afflicted attachment.
    Then later in the piece you reveal your loss of this afflicted attachment by referring to it as "none", that I thought was very clever!

    I love to see what you could do with Run DMC's and Aerosmith's "Walk This way"!!!!!!! 8)
    | Posted on 2007-01-08 00:00:00 | by danativ | [ Reply to This ]
      er, um .... weef?
    | Posted on 2006-11-15 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      Is good, I vant to take home and play nonstop
    over and over. I vant to make up mine own verds too
    but first, I learn yours,

    vvey funny! I thought syndrome was baseball stadium, no?

    Is dis de place vere I git wrestling tickets?

    I want to see them die! I sorry, did I mess up your love songs?

    love songs, make different kind of wrestling, you know??


    hahahahahahah!j

    Question, do I need buy ticket to wrestle girl??

    Plees advise?

    Nan
    | Posted on 2006-11-15 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]


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