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    dots Submission Name: In the Sundots
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    Author: austin
    ASL Info:    22/ Male/ Odessa, Texas
    Elite Ratio:    4.41 - 376/396/84
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Friendship
    Total Views: 965
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 893



    Description:
       This s a new song that i've written. It starts of mellow, then the guitars crash at the chorus. It sounds good, in the drop C tuning that it's in.


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    dotsIn the Sundots
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    So many stones
    i've been throwing
    one of us knows
    the answer to something
    i've never felt
    right for one thing
    thats why i'll go
    but i'll tell you one thing

    I never felt right, until i saw your eyes
    for a moment in time, it brought me to life
    when things all go wrong, look up and smile
    I'll be in the sun, watching you all the while

    I know I'm ready,
    I'm going away
    don't hide your love
    don't lock it away
    you have to be strong
    and you'll be okay
    but before I go, I'm gonna say

    I never felt right, until i saw your eyes
    for a moment in time, it brought me to life
    when things all go wrong, look up and smile
    I'll be in the sun, watchng you all the while.




    Submitted on 2006-11-15 17:45:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Brent,
    You have written a really good piece here. I like the course a lot. It shows that no matter what happens in a relationship you'll always care about that person...even if you aren't together anymore. I like that idea too. Because sometimes exes just need to know that everything yall went through together was not a lie.
    Wonderful write. :)
    Beth

    | Posted on 2006-11-19 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, really wish i could hear this played. Really great as a poem or song. Gonna make this short as i want to read some more of your work. Good job, well done. x

    ~lou~
    | Posted on 2006-11-16 00:00:00 | by elseibi | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, I think I've read every single one of your pieces at least twice...but never commented before. So...I'll do so on this one. First, I'm sure it sounds awesome when you play it. Secondly, maybe I'm just metaphorical...but...after reading it a couple times...I kinda took the sun as being a heart. Whoever your leaving, whoever's eyes made you feel so right, will probably always have you in their heart, and therefore, you will be with them all the while. Because when you love someone they're pretty much everywhere. Whether it's the sun or...whatever...they're just there. I liked it....I'll definitely keep reading. ~hailie~
    | Posted on 2006-11-15 00:00:00 | by loveispain | [ Reply to This ]
      These are some lovely lyrics. They are sad yet beautiful in the way they express the love and admiration that go along with real friendship and love. As I read this I interpreted this as someone who dies and continues to watch over this one special person they had in their life. That one person that made all the difference to them. It says that love never dies, even in death itself, and that even when someone does die, they still live on watching over you. It is comforting to read, I have lost many people in my life and to think that they are still there watching over me is a wonderful thought. Lovely write.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2006-12-03 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]


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