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Author: elseibi
ASL Info:    20/f/uk
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You



You may not realise,
how many lives you affect,
just by being,
how many smiles you cause,
days you brighten,
hearts you melt.

Stop and think for a second,
the difference you make,
to the world.

It may seem small,
it may seem insignificant,
but to the people around you,
it really matters.

You never know,
to someone nearby,
you may be the difference,
between living,
and just existing.

And when you find that person,
to whome you mean the world,
never,
ever,
let them go.





Submitted on 2006-11-16 07:07:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Spelling error!!! whome?? whome??

Okay, that was random--but I had to say it. Nice job, and truthful--I wish my friend Anthony would have realized that before his attempt at harakiri. (No, he didn't use a samurai sword.) He's still around, but... he's not the same person. He never will be.

Amazing that a poem with optimistic overtones reminds me of something so depressing...could be I'm just a tired old man to begin with.

--crimson echo
| Posted on 2006-12-01 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]
  a beautiful, honest write. good flow, and i especially love this part:

"You never know,
to someone nearby,
you may be the difference,
between living,
and just existing.

And when you find that person,
to whome you mean the world,
never,
ever,
let them go."

how very true! keep it up <3
kez
| Posted on 2006-11-16 00:00:00 | by everafter | [ Reply to This ]
  Aaaah, Louise! What a wonderful poem! And you may never know how many smiles you have caused and lives you have changed by this remarkable poem!
| Posted on 2006-11-16 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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