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    dots Submission Name: Puppet Stringsdots
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    Author: Acid
    ASL Info:    17/M/Newport, WA
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 103/159/76
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 288
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    My little friend, emotionless and plain,
    My puppet, dear, brings psychotic strain,
    The iron in his heart, is messing with my brain.

    His shadow wrought, upon my soul,
    Grinning, gaping, black as coal,
    Makes me wonder, am I whole?

    Lilting notes, a trembling hand,
    Plucks the strings, strand by strand,
    The chior in my heart so bland.

    Singing of the metal wrought,
    Telling me, I should not have bought,
    This puppet in my hand, I sought.

    An aria of silence, down within my core,
    Deepness so profound, and I found so much more,
    Floating in myself, I can finally soar.

    The puppet plays a melody, well worn,
    I dance and sing, I cry and mourn,
    A puppeteer, sundered and forlorn.

    Myself, the puppet master,
    Dead and dieing faster.

    Now I wear my puppet's strings,
    Along with such assorted things.

    I have fallen into the part,
    An actor true, I take to heart.

    I play a show of reversing roles,
    But now I know, that we switched souls.




    Submitted on 2006-11-16 11:26:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      o.O I like this. Dark, creepy, and the twist at the end. *instant plus points*
    The imagery whacks me like a wet towel in the morning, completely mind blowing, some of the words I fail to comprehend, well the friendly dictionary is always there to support me.
    However, my spelling mistake alert has gone off, "chior" should be "choir" and "dieing" should be "dying", unless you purposely misspelled the latter.
    The three line rhyme sequence somehow to me seems unfinished or left hanging, just like a puppet, and I'm not sure if that was intended but it's a perfect way to put the poem, especially about puppets.
    After all, are we not all puppets capable of "independent" thought?
    Cheers, thank you for the read.
    Azuire
    | Posted on 2007-01-20 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
      creeepy. Likke u become something u thout youd never be but then b4 u know it you are.

    awsome poem yo.
    | Posted on 2006-12-12 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      O.o why have I not seen this before? This is brilliance. Perfection of darkness, notoriosity and style. Great imagery and a unique idea. I think I'll put this one into my favourites.
    | Posted on 2006-11-20 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      This was seriously creepy. At first you're you, then suddenly you're something else. Very creepy, very dark. I loved this poem, definitly going under faves:)


    Only thing is, watch your spelling. Nitpicking, I know...

    Anywhoo,
    Great write,
    Lia
    | Posted on 2006-11-18 00:00:00 | by Glassy Eyed | [ Reply to This ]



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