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    dots Submission Name: Cliche'dots

    Author: Pastel Branches
    Elite Ratio:    2.78 - 1/1/1
    Words: 371
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Slip the clock
    wind moments up a staircase
    into tomorrow's light,
    from yesterday's past

    We were young;
    green to our love
    although this is only a dream
    forgotten and pushed down

    Yet also an ignored reality
    that lingers, pleasantly drifting
    like the scent of my orchids
    confined within the greenhouse,
    where a vibrant sensuality
    crept upon my tongue,
    that dripped like honey
    in tender sugared kiss

    His tongue slipped
    truth flew forth,
    graced air with words
    overused and cliché
    but never boring,
    the cherished treasure
    for a torn heart

    "I love you" he proclaimed,
    and stated that morning
    always comes too quickly

    He refused to open the shades,
    I darkened the shading
    upon my paper,
    and accidentally smeared charcoal
    in streaks across his face
    letting passion overwhelm

    I longed to lick him clean,
    imagined breathing life
    into the drawing
    of our every kiss
    to drift there, resting
    in his holds strength,
    with my head upon his chest
    absorbing the beat of life,
    that pounds the hum of love

    I thought about
    screaming out in confession

    "I am a poet!!
    ignore my silly giggles,
    I only pretend
    to be a normal girl
    with simple words"

    Silence stirred...
    or I could say:

    "My thoughts are painted images
    that grow vine-like,
    twisting, and churning
    a machine of wants,
    spilling out dedications,
    that I'm too shy for you to hear"

    But if I admitted,
    to being more,
    I would have standards,
    would have to be more
    in order to live up
    to high expectations

    Then poetry would wilt,
    the orchid's lavender hues
    soon would fade

    I'd have to produce
    for a reason;
    for his eyes to see,
    other than my insatiable need
    to ramble endlessly
    about heart's desires
    and needful pleas

    I giggled again,
    and just whispered,
    "I love you too"

    Could I have been
    any more cliché???

    Submitted on 2006-11-16 15:23:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very beautifully written!

    "We were young;
    green to our love"
    This was a very simplistic, but very profound way to put it all the same. Very nicely put!

    I enjoyed this very much! Keep writing!

    | Posted on 2006-11-16 00:00:00 | by WinterInJuly | [ Reply to This ]

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