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The Way I Am

Author: Foreseer
ASL Info:    20/F/In Love
Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 156 /86 /23
Words: 72
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Twicked it a bit from my original poem.

The Way I Am

The way I am
is thanks to you.
My vision blurred
from the truth.
Lies and deception
are second nature.
How did I come
to where I am now?
It's not like you care, right?
You gave it up without a fight.
So I'll continue now,
walking away, that I vow.
I'll create a path,
using your words.

Submitted on 2006-11-16 21:25:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is pretty darn good! I like it, i really like that i can most certainly relate to it as im sure man people can. The flow was very nice and your word usage was good. I really liked the beginning:"The way I am
is thanks to you.
My vision blurred
from the truth.
Lies and deception
are second nature"
Those lines really stood out to me the most. very nice write!
| Posted on 2007-06-29 00:00:00 | by EL | [ Reply to This ]
  nice poem. good flow, intreasting message.
write on,
| Posted on 2007-01-18 00:00:00 | by EmeRalDEyeZ5491 | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey I like this preatty cool nice way to put it , ty
| Posted on 2006-12-25 00:00:00 | by ty | [ Reply to This ]
  Nice.the simplicity in the style helps clearify the words.i like (i dont see much of that) aws for the story line in the poem i like the feeling, we've been there before on this side of the screen (i say we couse im crazy lol)bravo keep it up
| Posted on 2006-11-16 00:00:00 | by Gop | [ Reply to This ]

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