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The way I am is thanks to you. My vision blurred from the truth. Lies and deception are second nature. How did I come to where I am now? It's not like you care, right? You gave it up without a fight. So I'll continue now, walking away, that I vow. I'll create a path, using your words. |
This is pretty darn good! I like it, i really like that i can most certainly relate to it as im sure man people can. The flow was very nice and your word usage was good. I really liked the beginning:"The way I am is thanks to you. My vision blurred from the truth. Lies and deception are second nature" Those lines really stood out to me the most. very nice write! | Posted on 2007-06-29 00:00:00 | by EL | [ Reply to This ] | nice poem. good flow, intreasting message. | write on, lanna | Posted on 2007-01-18 00:00:00 | by EmeRalDEyeZ5491 | [ Reply to This ] | Hey I like this preatty cool nice way to put it , ty | | Posted on 2006-12-25 00:00:00 | by ty | [ Reply to This ] | Nice.the simplicity in the style helps clearify the words.i like (i dont see much of that) aws for the story line in the poem i like the feeling, we've been there before on this side of the screen (i say we couse im crazy lol)bravo keep it up | | Posted on 2006-11-16 00:00:00 | by Gop | [ Reply to This ] | |