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    dots Submission Name: The Way I Amdots
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    Author: Foreseer
    ASL Info:    20/F/In Love
    Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 156/86/23
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1182
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 405



    Description:
       Twicked it a bit from my original poem.


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    dotsThe Way I Amdots
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    The way I am
    is thanks to you.
    My vision blurred
    from the truth.
    Lies and deception
    are second nature.
    How did I come
    to where I am now?
    It's not like you care, right?
    You gave it up without a fight.
    So I'll continue now,
    walking away, that I vow.
    I'll create a path,
    using your words.




    Submitted on 2006-11-16 21:25:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is pretty darn good! I like it, i really like that i can most certainly relate to it as im sure man people can. The flow was very nice and your word usage was good. I really liked the beginning:"The way I am
    is thanks to you.
    My vision blurred
    from the truth.
    Lies and deception
    are second nature"
    Those lines really stood out to me the most. very nice write!
    | Posted on 2007-06-29 00:00:00 | by EL | [ Reply to This ]
      nice poem. good flow, intreasting message.
    write on,
    lanna
    | Posted on 2007-01-18 00:00:00 | by EmeRalDEyeZ5491 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey I like this preatty cool nice way to put it , ty
    | Posted on 2006-12-25 00:00:00 | by ty | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice.the simplicity in the style helps clearify the words.i like (i dont see much of that) aws for the story line in the poem i like the feeling, we've been there before on this side of the screen (i say we couse im crazy lol)bravo keep it up
    | Posted on 2006-11-16 00:00:00 | by Gop | [ Reply to This ]


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