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    dots Submission Name: Tears and fixturesdots
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    Author: atonement
    Elite Ratio:    2.71 - 106/186/98
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    dotsTears and fixturesdots
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    I swallow,
    the lump still stays
    in my throat.
    I walk towards,
    the doors of the kingdom
    I left so long ago.
    I take in the air,
    then let it out,
    brace myself.
    I grasp the handles,
    fear and sorrow
    takes their toll.
    I stand inside
    the walls that
    I use to hide behind.
    I see them,
    a like fixtures,
    with tears.
    I walk towards
    the black box
    and I too begin
    to cry.
    I take a place to
    become a fixture.
    I feel so empty,
    as the sorrow
    overwhelms,
    and the tears
    fill my eyes.





    Submitted on 2006-11-16 23:04:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hmmm.

    Intriguing.

    So you have become just another "fixture?"

    Break out of the walls man! They controool.

    >.<

    -- Jason Clement
    | Posted on 2006-12-15 00:00:00 | by Jason_Clement | [ Reply to This ]


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