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    dots Submission Name: Soaringdots
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    Author: Nagow
    ASL Info:    20/f/Denmark
    Elite Ratio:    2.56 - 56/70/29
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 1019
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    Bytes: 438



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       This is just thoughts..



    If there are some spelling mistakes, then it's eather just a typing mistake, or because English isn't my first language.. c",)


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    dotsSoaringdots
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    Standing on the floor
    feeling like I'm gonna fall
    cause now there are no more
    bricks to built up my wall
    My wings are gone I can not soar
    afraid I can't contain it all

    Then the floor disapears
    and my body falls down
    it's strange I have no fears
    Beneath me there's a whole new town
    My eyes contain no tears
    my words contain no sound..




    Submitted on 2004-05-29 03:54:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is pretty good. I don't normally care for rhyme, but I don't feel that it hurts this piece. I like the emotion you put into it.
    | Posted on 2004-05-29 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      me likey..... however, I think there could be a couple more lines, perhaps about hitting the ground or not hitting the ground or something strange like that. There were only two typos: can not is one word, cannot..... disapears = disappears. Great job otherwise. ~Cora
    | Posted on 2004-05-29 00:00:00 | by Cora Windover | [ Reply to This ]


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