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    dots Submission Name: All or Nothingdots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Donít let it slip through your hands.
    My heads under Iím choking on the sand.
    Now we only have ashes and faintly glowing ember.
    Someday in my empty eyes theyíll be things I wonít remember.
    My hearts been around and become travel-worn.
    My love is for no one I have too much leaving me forlorn.
    You leave my eyes moon-less.
    My voice has become tuneless.
    Right when Iím ready to embrace something sweet.
    Is the same time you pack your feelings and retreat.
    I gracefully compose my rage.
    Lessons backlash me I will surely learn with age.
    I know I couldnít feel any worse.
    So, I untangle my feelings in verse.
    I breath deeply and try to calm.
    Iím just glad to have felt your wondrous palm.
    My heart is filled completely with Loveís stuffing.
    So, you have to make a choice I want all or nothing.




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    ||| Comments |||
      Quite true in most cases. Hopefully, those in relationships will be able to work things out successfully. Your message is easily understood, I like that. "So, I untangle my feelings in verse." Nice line. However, I think the last line, when the narrator is asking that one person about their choice, can cause a lot of pressure upon that individual. But, you're right. You have to know the truth. And if they protest, you can always be friends, right?
    | Posted on 2004-01-29 00:00:00 | by PastelSky | [ Reply to This ]


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