Awww. I love this! I wish this were my life. So pretty... I want it! Hah... you're an excellent writer. This piece was really interesting because you made me jump up and down and be all happy cuz i want your life! *I'm strange today... don't mind me*
ok. i'm completely lost. i really like the title... but i just don't understand the connection between hope and rain purging consciences and drunken weeping. also, i don't what is a gentle Easter either :(
I don't know how well this will stand up to psycho-analysis, but I liked it. Maybe a slight alteration of the last two lines can make the end more hazily hopeful or a continuance of earlier playfulness?
beautiful little love poem. I like the image of 'rainy-day slumber'. and the ending is great. it still keeps me thinking to figure it out but it sounds so good. and pieces that keep me thinking are always good.
I guess it's a think we all need, and only we - people - can bring such wonderful hope to each other. I feel... cold and broken, and this poem has warmed me up for a moment, it's a bright piece... such power inside.
this is just beautiful, dumplin. much more hopeful than your previous one (which i haven't commented on yet 'cause i'm needing to read it again...!). i love the image of "rainy day slumber." i love that stuff! and i agree with learah, the last two lines are just incredible.
Love those intertwined emotions displayed here...nostalgia and comfort, reassurance and failure. There's also a grey, apathic feeling to it, like just lying there with that special someone, both of you lost in thoughts.
hm i dunno I think there's some kind of charm missing from it.... you're starting to move towards just telling a scenario, no showing it. I'd say transform a few of those lines into exquisite little images that, although none of us had thought of it before, work so well... the only line of true merit is the title line, "wrap me in hope".... expand on the blanket thee, perhaps...