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    dots Submission Name: the silence withindots
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    Author: puppet
    Elite Ratio:    2.12 - 1/2/3
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Misc/I am dead inside
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       i hav just lost the only woman i have ever loved


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    dotsthe silence withindots
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    I scream within NoOne hears me,
    I stand alone NoOne sees me
    Time passes and still NoOne knows I exist,
    But then I see a beautiful angel,
    Shes'looking at me her tears flow freely
    from the screams of pain she hears,
    She speaks so tenderly to me she says
    all will be well,and it is.
    For long years she stands by my side,
    She lends me comfort when I need it,
    and she holds me when I cry.
    She is my world.But then I fail her,
    I scream within for her to forgive me.
    my sobs of agony go UnNoticed.
    I am begging you my beautiful angel
    hear my screams feel my love and know
    I will never cause you pain again.
    I trully,madly,deeply love you






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      I cant say anything about past love i know how it burns
    but to let go , let the flames only burn brighter to yet love anther

    wounds heal scars remain , only love you can end that pain
    see you have your angel if you'd only see what you are not seeing , your not alone your not empty . i can see you, but can you see me ?


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    my love

    , your angel
    | Posted on 2013-12-18 00:00:00 | by kyserin | [ Reply to This ]


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