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    dots Submission Name: You can take a life without killingdots
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    Author: Ceyx
    Elite Ratio:    5.69 - 111/107/81
    Words: 337
    Class/Type: Poetry/Betrayal
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    Average Vote:    3.0000
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    dotsYou can take a life without killingdots
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    The notes that you left give me paper-cuts and I...
    I can't take this cold feeling when I hear your name
    It's all pushing from every direction and I...
    I just fucking pray that you are feeling the same

    Your words may not cause me to bleed but-
    they hurt so much
    Your name may not cause me to freeze to death but-
    it's so damn cold alone

    Just because I'm not dead (not dead) not dead
    Does not mean that you did not fuck me over
    And just because I'm not dead (not dead) not dead
    Don't think for a second I don't feel any pain

    The gifts that you gave to me make me cry and I...
    I can't stand to wake up from a dream about you
    There's a lack of trust behind a scared heart and I...
    I want to hold you 'round the throat 'til your lips turn blue


    The memories may not cause me to die but-
    they hurt so fucking much
    The scars you left may not cause me not to dream but-
    it sucks so much to be alone

    Just because I'm not dead (not dead) not dead
    Does not mean that you meant nothing to me
    And just because I'm not dead (not dead) not dead
    Don't think for a second that you're safe...

    Don't think for a second that you're safe

    The things that you do come back threefold

    Don't think for a second that you're safe

    Don't think for a second that we're done now

    Don't think for a second that you're safe

    It's not over 'til you feel the same as me......





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      Wow, this is some powerful stuff. Very demonesque ending lines, great ounce of darkness to the entire piece and an excellent organization of the entire order of words. Was this written as a real life emotion towards someone?
    | Posted on 2006-11-18 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      man oh man...
    that was intense~
    you said you did not like it???
    i LOVE it... it's so... scary...
    i'd fix nothing, it is formatically ( i made that word up) perfect.
    i'm pretty damn sure i know who this is about...
    and don't worry- she'll get hers.
    love you~
    this is being favorited RIGHT NOW.
    ~Syn
    | Posted on 2006-11-17 00:00:00 | by Syn | [ Reply to This ]
      sigh that was awsome. tho i can't help but think i've heard it somewhere before. oh well, i know the feeling. it seems so polished and well thought out. was it written for someone in particular?
    | Posted on 2006-11-17 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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