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Passion


Author: Amanda Lynn
Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 332 /193 /56
Words: 34
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Passion



Lazily swaying
to the beat of my heart,
moving to and fro,
vibrating non stop,
orgasmicly convulsing,
writhing in exquisite pain,
breathing you in deeply,
at the whisper of my name.





Submitted on 2006-11-17 22:32:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  haha i like this a lot!!! its amazing!!!
~akaila~

ya i agree wit whirl its goin in my favs!! great job!
| Posted on 2007-01-04 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
  I REALLY LIKE YOUR PIECE. THE TITLE POURS OUT OF EVERY WORD, AND THE CLIMAX IS CLEARLY SCREAMING TO BE RELEASED IN A TORRENT OF EMOTION. I LOVE IT...

-DALLAS-
-TO BE DAMNED IS TO BE SET FREE-
| Posted on 2006-12-02 00:00:00 | by DEATHISMYMUSE | [ Reply to This ]
  oh, this is great...i was just waiting for the scream.."YES!!"
this sounds like an orgasm to me...
great write!!
michelle

ps think i'll add this to my favs
| Posted on 2006-11-20 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
  aw man I wish I wrote this poem. It feels like something I would of written. If I read it a fourth time I'll start thinking I did.
Nice work. I like the feel of this piece.

The Poor Man's Poet.
| Posted on 2006-11-18 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]


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