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    dots Submission Name: To My Momdots
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    Author: DrewDilla
    ASL Info:    25/M/Chicago
    Elite Ratio:    2.81 - 131/196/51
    Words: 619
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Love
    Total Views: 1001
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1941



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       I love my mom and this what I did in a short time. But I think it needs more. What yall think?


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    dotsTo My Momdots
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    Dear Mom,



    I just want to say happy birthday, but I just donít know the way to explain my words by what I say. But I think I can rhyme it. That you can admit? So put the smoke down and read a bit. Oh and hey itís not lit right. I know cause itís night hey if you need a light I got one. And you can call me for fun. Iíll say IĎm to young. Then door bell just rung. I say donít get it hun but instead listen. YOU ARE THE BEST. Better then all the rest. I was truly blessed, because Youíre my MOM. You meet dad after he had got out of Nom. Ya this gona be on eliteskills.com An Anything I ever needed you gave to me. Always making me feel free. Like a bee and youíre the queen. Look its ok to be a little mean I know I donít clean my room to keen, but close you know what I mean? You wear always there when I wasnít. When things werenít pleasant. The car Accident I meant. Like I got sent to middle school age. But it was my lifeís next page. They even put me in a cage. I never got in a violent rage, cause u were there every day. So I always knew you were on your way. So weíd go outside n play. You know have a square out there. You always made it fair. That word used to make u care. SQUARE Remember back when I had long hair. It made some people stair at how long it was. Remember back when us 2 first got a buzz. Together. And my hair look is it getting redder or darker. Ya I think Iím getten smarter. So Iíll go back to school. And I can use a recorder tool. Thatís really cool, but ya you are a rare jewel. And again Im glad Iím your son. So now the poems done.





    Love,
    Andrew




    Submitted on 2006-11-18 13:28:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Sweet, very sweet. ur mom should be proud to have a son who loves her at much as u do her. there were a couple of grammatical errors, but all in all i hope my son writes something for me about how much i mean too him and how much he loves me. wonderful
    | Posted on 2006-11-23 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]
      thats beautiful =] thats all i can say to that
    | Posted on 2006-11-20 00:00:00 | by dark lover | [ Reply to This ]


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