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    dots Submission Name: Do You Ever Wish...dots
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    Author: Robert Neville
    ASL Info:    16/m/London
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 10/192/232
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 708
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 999



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    dotsDo You Ever Wish...dots
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    Look at me, typing my words
    Telling my secrets,
    Unravelling my lies

    I wish I could be in love with you
    Because right now Iím in limbo
    And I canít back out
    Or move anywhere
    And Iím stuck here in limbo
    And I want it over with
    I need it over with
    Or I need it to begin
    Iíd love for it to begin

    Enjamb
    Ment and loverís glares
    Hurt me beyond contempt
    Stare me in the face
    And tell me what you like

    I wish I could just be in love
    Right now Iím in limbo
    And I canít back out
    Or move for breathing space
    Iím stuck here in your limbo
    And I need it over with
    I need you more than I know
    Or I need it to be over
    Iíd love for it to end

    So hereís to you
    And hereís to him and him and him
    Cheers cheers cheers
    Look me in the eye

    Do you ever wish you were in love?




    Submitted on 2006-11-18 14:19:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i wish i was in love... great just great. in limbo is such a perfect way to describe it. i especiall liked the toast at the end. mmmm wonderful
    | Posted on 2006-11-18 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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